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with my classmate’s peer review and my first paper with rubric grades. perfect my essay give me a final draft

Enming Zang

Source Integration:

• Does the author discuss the outside sources where relevant and in detail?
  • Zweig while you do utilize the given sources expressing in detailing what their views, you only used two quotes in about three pages and the paragraphs themselves were rather short. (31)
• Does the author have a discussion of how the outside sources impact the author’s overall argument? Is there inter-textual reading of outside sources (as in discussing how one source relates to another)?
  • Zweig while you do utilize the given sources expressing in detailing what their views, you only used two quotes in about three pages and the paragraphs themselves were rather short. (31)
• Are quotes and paraphrases from the outside sources properly integrated into the text (and not dropped in)?
  • You do not really integrate the sources into your argument, for example in paragraph two you started out with the author’s last name then either paraphrased or quoted him (I couldn’t tell which). Now if an outsider were to read this they are going to ask who the heck is this zweig fellow it is going to lead the reader getting confused. (63)
• Is the author careful to make sure his or her voice is prominent and that the outside sources are not speaking for him or her?
  • The author is keeping their own voice prominent in the paper utilizing paraphrasing more than quotations when writing their paragraphs which hurts the paper since we never really see the sources explicitly agreeing with her in context. (38)
• Are the outside sources relevant, not dated, and sufficient to advance the discussion the author is having?
  • The outside sources are relevant to the paper itself, I have zero complaints in this regard but they do not flow in the paper itself. Introducing both sources at the introduction or in the second paragraph would allow you to just use the author’s name and quote throughout the paper, but the lack of introducing the sources really hurt’s your arguments.  (62)

Check for Chicago In-text citation and the Bibliography page:

• Are the footnotes done correctly? If you’re not sure, take a minute to look it up and double-check—it’s good for you to learn as well!
  • I believe the footnotes themselves were used and integrated properly, so I have nothing to say on that note. (20)
• If there are errors, where are they and how can they be fixed?
  • The main errors of this paper is in the citations in which the quotations are never actually quoted, I would highly recommend going through the paper and adding quotations marks or make it clear that you are paraphrasing not quoting. (41)
• Are all sources cited in the paper also cited on the Bibliography? Is the formatting for the Bibliography correct?  How can it be fixed?
  • The bibliography was proper done however I would recommend you using a page break in word before the bibliography in order to ensure that the bibliography is always on it’s own unique page, this tends to make writing the paper easier since you do not need to worry about making sure it is on it’s own page. (58)

Organization and argument:

• Does the essay have a clear organizational structure? Can you follow it?
  • I believe that you have a clear idea and structure for this paper, but I am unable to truly follow it, for instance I believe that your paper’s thesis statement was the last sentence of the paper but I am not one hundred percent sure about this. Your body paragraphs lack true topic sentences and do not really flow that well. (62)
• Does the writer use a variety of appeals to make the argument?
  • You may want to use more quotes from the authors to help prove your thesis, given that you are using so many short paragraphs, since they really don’t add anything in the long run. You could try to explain why others would want to follow and go along with your arguments, approaching the question from the views of workers, businesses ect and how your solution benefits all parties. (69)
• Does the essay flow from one idea to the next using transitions and linking ideas?
  • The paragraph’s themselves do not flow well when reading, the body paragraphs come across to brief and broken up, I would highly recommend trying to merge some of the body paragraphs together or add quotations to them since they came across as more fluff than anything else. (48)

The struggle of workers of diversity and the minimum wage worker in America

Enming Zang

Rutgers

Prof. Montoya

Writing in labor studies & employment relationship

2020/06/28

The struggle of workers of diversity and the minimum wage worker and ideas of worker engagement

Do the concepts of engagement and meaningful work exist for a worker of diversity-one who makes minimum wage?

Minimum wage and diversity have been a significant issue of concern, and some history on the same could be retrieved from the 1950s when most of the workers in America comprised white men. This is a clear indication of some groups being neglected by gender or racial basis hence limiting the existence of diversity in the workforce. Most of the men who had secured employment were the breadwinners in their households, retiring at the age of 65 and later spending their old age in leisure. However, things have changed in the current error whereby the workforce of American businesses has become diverse with a mix of race, gender, age, and religion. The current workforce diversity involves everyone regardless of their identity in terms of age, gender, or race, as it used to happen in the 1950s.[1] This has been a significant advancement that has improved the conditions at workplaces, as well as the perceptions different groups have on one another.

Meaningful and engagement work is still a challenge for the minimum wage workers in many American companies because of the challenges diversity has posed. This is because of the different interests held by various groups, making it hard for them to share common values, which would greatly benefit their employers. Most business managers find capitalization of the mixture of ages, lifestyles, cultural backgrounds, and genders, a challenging affair in responding to the business opportunities creatively and rapidly.

In some American companies where the minimum wage employees come from diverse ethnic and racial backgrounds, the different native cultures and languages do not mix well. The diversity creates paranoia that the colleagues might be talking about the members of the different subgroups and assumptions that some subgroups regard themselves superior to others. These issues lead to poor relationships in the workplace, which may turn into conflicts and destroy a company’s reputation. Collaboration and sharing of knowledge and resources also become difficult. Rather than employees uniting to support business growth, they only focus on their interests, and the morale of everyone reduces[2].

In some companies, racial and gender discrimination is still a challenge that has affected productivity. There have been reports of some company managers giving preferential treatment to members of their race or ethnic groups. This differential treatment makes the employees’ morale and input from the other groups who believe that the managers’ favorites should have higher input into the company’s success. It is also evident that some female workers find themselves in a male-dominated working environment. The female employees feel intimidated and, in some cases, sexually harassed.[3] This is, therefore, a great challenge of diversity, which should be keenly liked upon. As companies consider diversifying their workplace, the right policies and ethical values should be clearly outlined to protect everyone is protected when they engage in workplaces dominated by other groups.

The productivity of the employees in the divided workforce is compromised because of unattainable teamwork. Low productivity is usually a direct indicator of a reduction in profits for the companies facing such challenges. Such businesses highly oppose the increment of the minimum wage for the employees, citing low income.[4]

Why should the American public care about engagement and meaningful work for a worker of diversity-one who makes minimum wage? Or is this just an inherent part (the price) of capitalism?

The American public should care about the work engagement of a diversified workforce and increment of the minimum wage. The engagement of workers’ diversity is a boost to the success of the businesses and the achievement of their long-term goals. Such engagement, however, depends on the kind of environment where these individuals are exposed to. The diversity of workers comes with diverse talents that bring fresh perspectives, views, and ideas that would be a significant boost to companies and the country’s economy at large. Through the same capabilities, businesses can thrive further, leading to the creation of more job opportunities. When businesses thrive, there are more chances of minimum wages being increased by employers because they realize more profits and are interested in further motivation for their employees.[5]

Diversity does not only exist among employees but is also based on the fact that clients come from different ethnic or racial backgrounds, cultures, genders, and abilities. The lack of engagement of a diversified workforce in the businesses can reduce managers’ ability and customer relations personnel to communicate well with diverse customers. These communication barriers are likely to discourage some clients and lead to a reduced customer base. Sometimes it also becomes impossible for businesses to utilize opportunities in different markets because lack of diversity limits their chances of adjusting to such workplaces. The result of these issues would be lower profits for the employers and low minimum wages for the workers. Workers’ diversity provides an opportunity for the interrelationships of individuals from different backgrounds and abilities. This creates a framework for a strategic lens of viewing the world and a learning exchange forum.[6]

In conclusion, the meaningful and engagement work for a minimum wage worker of diversity is still a challenge in America today. This has led to less productivity of businesses and, consequently, low minimum wages. The American public should, therefore, focus on working towards the issues of work engagement, diversified workforce, and increment of the minimum wage. This would, however, happen by the implementation of policies that would ensure that regardless of the representation of a certain group, everyone is comfortable within their working environment. Such considerations would lead to the proper utilization of diverse talents that bring fresh perspectives, views, and ideas a learning exchange forum to grow personal abilities and facilitate the growth of businesses.

References

Daniel Pink Chapter 1: Rise and Fall of Motivation (Links to an external site.)

https://www.experience.com/advice/professional-development/diversity-and-the-workplace/

https://youtu.be/rrkrvAUbU9Y

https://youtu.be/wmSGEGOVI34

[1] https://www.experience.com/advice/professional-development/diversity-and-the-workplace/

[2]. https://www.experience.com/advice/professional-development/diversity-and-the-workplace/

[3] https://youtu.be/rrkrvAUbU9Y

[4] https://youtu.be/wmSGEGOVI34.

[5] Daniel Pink Chapter 1: Rise and Fall of Motivation (Links to an external site.)

[6] https://youtu.be/rrkrvAUbU9Y