Descriptive essay. Please edit my essay and add more descriptive language. Max essay word count is 480. Don’t make it similar as the short story.
A recount from Sargent Noonan’s perspective based on the short story Lamb to the Slaughter
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ns that helped me get to the house in no time. A police officer’s worst nightmare investigating the death of a familiar face, an old friend at that it was a collective bad dream that day as everyone in this station knew. The deceased detective, a kind soul with a determined heart, a soon to-be father with a wife. However, preparing myself, I made my way into the scene, accompanied by a few of my colleagues.
Patrick’s body lay lifeless on the ground with his head in a pool of blood. I saw Mary crying incoherently. Her face was blotchy and her eyes were red and swollen. I always knew how devoted she was to him. I let the forensics and the photographing officers do their job as I continued studying the body.
Then, I started looking around. The crime scene seemed undisturbed as if nothing had happened. I observed the rooms, they looked neat and tidy. I can infer that the murder was adequately arranged, seeing that there is no sign of struggle on Patrick. I saw no signs of a forced break-in or broken windows. “The suspect must have entered the house while Mary went out, or the suspect had been in the house all time along?” I wondered. (did they check upstairs, door lock untampered with)
One of the forensics officers told me that a heavy blunt object was used to kill because Patrick’s head was split into small pieces. I encouraged the photographer to capture every corner of the scene, as every tiny detail remained important in the crime scene. I could feel the frustration of the other detectives engulfing the house as no one found clues or evidence related to the murder. I saw two officers carry Patrick’s body away after the forensic officer completed his work.
I felt sorry for Mary for losing a husband at a critical point in her pregnancy and pledged to get into the bottom of this case. I emphasized with her situation. I perceived Mary’s silence like that of an angel. I rang the forensic office to check on the progress attained. From the forensic office, I gathered that the suspect had left no minor clue at the scene. (did they check for blood trails, footprints outside the windows, interview neighbours)
I was further disturbed by the fact that no one had witnessed the crime. I realized that I was standing on the eastside expecting the sun to settle here. I needed a new approach to this case, which I had to treat every as a suspect. I kept a close eye on Mary with suspicious prodding glances full of shame. (confusing)
While I ate the limb offered by Mary, suddenly, something made me go quiet, I felt there was a metallic taste on my tongue. Weird as the meat had been cooking for a relatively long time and I saw Mary giggle in the other room. I smelt a rat.
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use more descriptive language. focus on investigation and lack of results.
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