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i did upload my paper and this paper worth 80% of my grade so i HAVE TO get an A on this. these are the advice from the teacher that need to be done: You certainly have an argumentative essay. But your counter argument could be a bit clearer. Your second body paragraph seems to start with a counter argument, which is a great idea. The best way to construct a counter argument/rebuttal paragraph is to start with evidence. I noticed that you cite Lain, but you do not have specific evidence (a quote or a statistic would be great) from Lain that supports your counter argument. It is important to have a real source supporting the counter argument because that will make it easier to refute. You already have multiple pieces of evidence from Steele that prove the counter argument wrong. But you need to explain toward the end of the paragraph how Steele’s experiment proves that Lain is wrong. The topic sentence of that counter argument paragraph begins with a very strong signpost, but the ending needs to include a refutation. Here is an example of a topic sentence with a counter argument and refutation: While some scholars argue that global climate change is not affected by humans, in reality, humans are contributing to climate change by … You do a nice job of starting your counter argument paragraph with a signpost. A counter argument signpost often looks something like this: “Some people argue…” A signpost shows the reader that you do not agree with those other people. In your next draft, make sure that you switch back to your argument using a transition (in reality, in actuality, the truth is) that makes your argument clear. Always remember to end with the reason(s) why your argument is correct (fill in the …), so that your argument seems stronger than the counter argument. I noticed a few different editing issues, but we do not proofread essays and correct all of the mistakes because that will not help you to understand the grammatical rules. Instead, I marked each time that you made one specific kind of grammatical error in the text below, and I wrote the name of the error next to it. I also put an explanation of the error below. If you are unclear about any of my comments, see the notes below and go to the Purdue OWL website: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/747/01/ – Avoid using words that directly address the reader like YOU and YOUR. – Avoid contractions – two words abbreviated with an apostrophe like can’t, didn’t, shouldn’t. Always spell out both words. – Left justify all paragraphs. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5CUF3bgazCE -FANBOYS (Run-ons or Fused Sentences): If run-on sentences are your nemesis, most often it is because you fail to put a comma before coordinate conjunctions that join two independent clauses (coordination). For instance, you need to put a comma before “and,” when you use “and” to join two sentences or independent clauses. This is true for all the FANBOYS or coordinate conjunctions. For example, “The film is a satire, but it is one well worth watching if you are interested in the art of persuasion.” Here is a link that will help: https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/general_writing/punctuation/independent_and_dependent_clauses/runonsentences.html – Hook: https://www.academicwritingsuccess.com/7-sensational-essay-hooks/ *********ARGUMENTAL ESSAY Guidelines The Research Paper assignment calls for you to derive an argumentative thesis and to support that thesis with an essay. The Research paper should be between 5-6 pages in MLA format and include a Works Cited page with at least 6 sources You should choose an audience appropriate for your topic. In other words, decide who should know about this topic? Also try answering the following question, “Why should my audience know about this topic?” This last question will help you to establish a strong thesis statement for the essay. Remember, this is a formal essay. Do not assume that your audience knows you personally. Use language appropriate for formal writing. Avoid using a personal tone (“I” or “me”) unless you are using yourself as an example to support a larger point. Supporting points should include: analyzing, showing relationships, and demonstrating with examples, facts, illustrations, data or other information. Review textbook chapters & course materials carefully for advice on choosing a subject, collecting strategies, using outside sources of information, drafting, preparing for peer review, visiting a tutor and revising. Review the lectures and class discussions covering formal vs. informal writing, thesis statements, topic sentences, unity and coherence, as these concepts will be used to evaluate the strength of your writing at this point. After writing your paper, revise carefully to: make certain the essay you have written meets the requirements of the assignment; use the appropriate formal, academic tone; eliminate contradictions, redundancy and lengthy summary; replace repeated words with new ones; limit your use of “be” verbs (was, were, am, are, is, will be, be, being, been); use noun appositives, verbal phrases, absolute phrases and other complex constructions to improve sentence style make certain that all of your sentences are complete; make certain that you spell words accurately; eliminate slang; give your work a title that indicates both your topic and some message about it. Assessment: Papers will be evaluated on the quality of the thesis (check for opinion and explanation) and supporting argument, on proper MLA-style, integration of relevant, sufficient and reliable textual support, and on the quality of your written expression. Be sure to review the instructor’s comments on your previous essays so that you can accentuate the positive and eliminate the negative Check the attached rubric in Canvas for details; note that this rubric emphasizes analysis of your topic and critical thinking skills