Should Guns Be Restricted Assignment | College Homework Help

I have already written the research paper/argumentative essay, all I need from you is an extra paragraph and some editing. I will provide the feedback I got from my professor from the first draft. Please edit and write according to it (feedback).

Feedback:
1. This good but I wonder about some of the information…they dont seemm to be your arguments but taken wholesale from somwhere…for example -a local news channel reported etc etc… reported from where? How is it local to your argument? Georgia, Florida etc. Is it only in America that these things happen? It does read like it was written by an American for an American outlet. You need to make you arguments specific to the points you are making in each paragraph. It cannot be like some extracts from a newspaper in America. It needs to be objective. It needs to be something that explains YOUR position in your thesis.
2. There is no counter argument/refutation paragraph. This is not an extended argumentative essay/research paper…because it has no counter argument/refutation paragraph. It supports the position you take in your thesis…and still is confusing. You do write ‘ To avoid these situations, we must restrict guns.’ but that does not make the paragraph a counter argument/refutation. What you say is a counter argument is not. It is another reason why ‘abuser’ or not nice people shouldnt have guns. I suggest in your 2nd draft, you make this clearer or use another argument that is clearly counter to your thesis position.

I have attached my first draft. Again, I am just looking for a few changes in the essay to satisfy my professors feedback, as well as a final body paragraph (optional). The decision is up to my writer if he or she thinks another one should be added. Also please try to match my way of writing and vocabulary, as I do not want to get caught. I think I have used enough sources but if needed, my writer may want to add a few more. If he or she does, please add it to the references page in APA format. Please also add in text citations and edit the ones I have used as I have been told I cited them wrong. Thank you